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Monday 25 November 2013

Review of Harry's Dredd Essay

Harry elaborated his points by using numerous examples of films to back up his points. Whether it was to name films the actors were in, or listing films that included similar or complete opposite statistics, Harry expanded his answer to its maximum via different techniques which were all effective. These points, alongside his facts about budget, comparison budgets and income really nailed down why Dredd did fail at the Box Office.

He links his statistics and facts back to his opinion, which creates effect for the reader to not be swayed by what he is saying but believe every word. The reason this is important is because it gets the point across smoothly but extremely quickly and avoids an excess in unimportant information.

By confidently using a negative semantic field of vocabulary, Harry put his points across sharply that Dredd flopped at the Box Office, and links them back through his opinion to the question. By doing this he gained a B grade mark, which is reflected in his writing. Harry's clear line of argument is represented through his constant opinion. By linking back to it after each point, he made out his opinion almost outweighed the facts as if they were supporting him.

To be critical about Harry's response, he could add in additional alternative vocabulary, rather than repeating the same words. 'Cult' seems to be used a bit too much, and different words could make it progressively more fluent. By expanding his knowledge with in the marketing area, he would use excelling understanding if backed up by his forceful opinion.

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